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This is the 4th part to the Narrative Poem Series, His Story, that I have been working on. If you have have not already checked out the first three parts, here are links to them. Part 1: [Only registered and activated users can see links. ] Part 2: [Only registered and activated users can see links. ] Part 3: [Only registered and activated users can see links. ] Listen to this as your read: [Only registered and activated users can see links. ] > At this point in the poem series with the introduction of new characters I have now began to refer to the main character as “Him” with a capital ‘H’ and His beloved as “Her” with a capital ‘H’. If “him” or “her” shows up in the story then it is not referring to the main character or His beloved. Enjoy & comment! His Story: Confusion & Confrontation The Beast Man gripped His throat tightly Attempting to squeeze the life out of Him Each gazing into one another’s eyes For what seemed like hours Days, months, maybe even years Those blood red eyes… He felt Himself slipping out of consciousness His pulse began to grow faint He looked up at the ceiling Still showing no sign of resistance All the thoughts that haunted Him Were still in His mind Weakening him… But then a gleaming thought came to Him Who else would finish this mission? Who else would save Her? Who else could fix this demented world? With all the evil that roamed it With the enemy still causing death & destruction He knew what saving Her meant He knew his journey couldn’t stop here This world would have hope It would have a future And He would ensure it Through Her & with Her No matter what… His eyes began to glow And with what strength He had Cocked back His knee Then delivered a blow Straight into the Beast Man’s stomach Pushing it as far as it would go in The Beast Man staggered for a moment Then He struck him in the throat Which caused the Beast Man’s grip to release Him He saw His opportunity Then as He fell to the ground He took a deep breath And prepared himself He chanted a spell Which consumed His hands with energy An energy that glowed fiercely Then he followed with a quick stance The Beast Man glared at Him Then also took a stance And smirked as the Beast Man’s hands began emitting a strange aura He could see his swords lying behind the Beast Man… They gazed into each other’s eyes One last time Then both leapt towards each other And in one strike And a flare of light The fight was over Both had their backs to the other now The Beast Man smirked Then stood straight up And immediately fell to the ground On to his knees, shocked… Snarling & angry the Beast Man screamed Then fell dead All the while He was looking over his shoulder Making sure the Beast Man was dead Then grabbed His two swords And ran through the busted door of his room Still having questions in His mind Curious as to what exactly had happened… As he made his way out into the main room All he saw was destruction and broken down walls Alarmed & now frustrated He heard another scream Followed by an explosion right outside Then hurried to the scene And what laid before His eyes was this… A tall, dark figure in armor wearing a hood That disguised his identity With a long saber strapped on his back Stepping on His best friend’s chest Who was visibly struggling And had received much damage The were more of the Beast Men Many more of them Scattered throughout the site Now all glaring at Him With their blood red eyes Displaying a strong desire to kill Him As He continued to scan the area He saw blood… And not just blood, but bodies The bodies of the kind woman’s family The very ones who had helped Him Given him a chance to relax To think things over And here they lie before Him Dead… The kind woman lay on the ground Crippled with tears flowing down her eyes Screaming as multiple Beast Men surrounded her He could not believe his eyes… And as He stood in a trance of disbelief The tall, dark figure looked in His direction As if staring into His very soul *In his mind He knew it & felt it strongly… She would not be able to aid Him this time He could barely feel Her presence There would be no miracle to rely on this time No power to save these people from their deaths Which also meant if He were to die this time Not even He would be saved by Her And He knew it… The tall, dark figure pointed at Him This signal caused a number of the Beast Men to lunge towards Him And as He stood there in a trance He struggled with how to handle the situation And could think of nothing else But to draw His swords And take a valiant stance As the Beast Men drew ever so closer… His two swords began to glow intensely Then He widened his stance Put His swords in a long position As far stretched out from Him as possible And as the several Beast Men were within arms reach He chanted a powerful spell Blazing in a spinning whirlwind of energy And rushing toward the tall, dark figure This led to the Beast Men falling out of the air Slashed in multiple areas And dead in what seemed like an instant Yet the tall, dark figure held his position And pulled out his saber Then stopped His whirlwind attack But He had accomplished what He wanted His best friend was freed from being crushed Then with His sword of light He chanted a spell Causing it to shine extremely bright & blinding And as the tall, dark figure looked away He swiftly moved in to grab & secure His best friend His best friend was now losing consciousness But smiled at Him To show he was in no danger of dying Reassured He laid His best friend beside Him gently And stood up to confront the tall, dark figure Who was now staring at Him Again as if looking into His soul Then the tall, dark figure laughed And told Him that tonight would be a night He would not forget The night when He would see the other side of Himself The Dark side… The one that could so easily turn against His own morals & values And serve the enemies evil intentions To eventually destroy this world As they stood staring at one another His anger began to grow At this point His best friend was unconscious And under the glistening moonlight He charged toward the tall, dark figure Who was now in a unique stance Raising his long saber high in the air He knew not what lay ahead Nor did He know how this battle was going to test Him And force Him to confront His other self As He continued charging toward the tall, dark figure His dark sword began to shine unusually brighter Unknown to Him On this moonlit night that He would never forget… Last edited by Mugetsu; January 13, 2012 at 06:09 AM. | ||||||||
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WOW your cliffhangers are always perfect.. his powers had a great discription too...this part of the story really lifted my mood n i needed that Mugetsu :)
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![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() | Okay first I notice some forgotten words towards the end 2) I like the fact that he was able to save his friend and his friend gave him that smile of I'm okay go get them and save your girl 3) I love the figure cloaked and shaded in darkness and the Beast man leader telling and daring Him to attack and then telling him that he is about to face the darkness that we all carry in our hearts. We may not always see it but it is there and that this will be one of his greatest battles to save his beloved because if he gives in there will be no way for him to save her. The fact that the stranger could see into his soul makes me ask if the stranger isn't him and just the dark part of him that he denies thus his sword is glowing bright than the light sword that I take for hope and the dark sword death and despair. Then there is the fact that even though He can still sense Her He can also tell that she is fading so you have a sense of desperation to find her now. But I can't wait till the next part to see if he gives into the darkness or if he can battle it and win | ||||||||
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The vagueness really adds to the poetic effect and the dual split personality thing is cool.
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![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() | LOL You should know I feel the need to say a bunch about your poems and I was reading it there at the end and was like uhh he oops there should be a few words here. | ||||||||
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i forgot to mention the song set the perfect theme!! especially for the scene with all the bodies.... did you have a song in the previous parts?
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