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Old March 19, 2012   #1
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That was beautiful Dany. I loved all the details and the symbolism of the lady in black. I think you had some little grammar issues but that's all that felt off or maybe it was the flow *shrugs* can't exactly pinpoint it.
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lol will go with the grammar issue as well o.0
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though uh was kinda hard to find a place to put all the words and not let one slipping away unnoticed
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I liked it nicely done thank you for the post love to see more soon.
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Sorry I took so long to reply Dany I was swamped there for awhile >_<
Any about your poem I see words that are missing and some that should be switched around some to help with the flow of the poem. Other than that the imagery that you used was great.

Again I apologize for taking so long and thank you for sharing this
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lol is ok no worries sakura it was no hurry
i see
changed few lines
put 2/3 new words but lol might not changed much o.0
u could tell me were words are missing? i don't like to be incomplete :O
i can always put few more haha
i'll never find the places especially when i'm tired :D
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