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Old April 12, 2012   #1
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Default The Destiny of life [Poem]

As my mind drifts to an ethereal plane
I take one last look at the silhouette that was my soul
It is my time to lay peacefully in that sweet surrender
I have long used the gift of borrowed life

My essence will scatter like Leafs in the wind
Dancing in the breeze eternally playful
For once i will not think i will just be
And find my place in the stillness of nature

It is time to return to home now
To the source where life begins and stops
Back to the embrace of Mother and Father
Where my presence have always belonged

Because all life one day will expire
For we were all born to die
Cursed and gifted by our mortality
Which chose our destiny from the start
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That was a very nice poem, nice details and symbolism. One thing your transition to the second stanza was kinda like a giant leap straight there,the transition didn't flow too well. It just kinda jumped there.
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Nice. Only when things cease, do they become great.
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This was really nicely done. I have to say that your changing up of themes on your last few poems has been refreshing. Thank you once again for sharing your insight with words.
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That was a very nice poem, nice details and symbolism. One thing your transition to the second stanza was kinda like a giant leap straight there,the transition didn't flow too well. It just kinda jumped there.
i kinda get what you mean, but not at all..
it makes sense to me the way it is
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This was really nicely done. I have to say that your changing up of themes on your last few poems has been refreshing. Thank you once again for sharing your insight with words.
Thank you Doc ^_^

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2 poems in a day?

im getting greedy. lol jk

i write when it comes outta of me and whatever comes outta me
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Nice poem Rok... the last stanza was my favorite. Good detailing... overall, i thought it was nice.
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good poem Rok.

For me it was like when ppl contemplate their mortality, then they embrace the value of themselves and each day that they have and appreciate their live's just that much more.

I liked your poem alot Rok!
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Yet another brilliant poem Rok.
I found it mournful but also kinda comforting.
Very nice
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Your poem, is your disposition on life. Many writers had made the same kind, but all of these are spectacular an unique as looking through a diamonds faces and wondering in awe at each face, knowing it is still one intricate object.

I mean, its very good. :>

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